Round 1: Kyra vs. Red (#6)

May 30th, 2012, 2:57 pm

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Reply lizard-socks, May 30th, 2012, 3:00 pm

*final page* Normally Red isn't so direct in her battles, but feeding Kyra a sleeping formula can hardly be described as "fighting", and Kyra's so tiny it doesn't take much to put her to sleep.

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Reply Phenoix12, May 30th, 2012, 5:32 pm

There were only two things in this whole thing that irked me a bit. Everything else is fine.
1. She is a child or at least child like in her speech. Do to her shyness she usually does not speak to people she doesn’t know that well. In combat she speaks more but still in the child like manner. What I’m saying is that her speech was a bit too serious for her.
2. She doesn’t use potions or drugs. She most likely would have used her puppets to constrain her enemy or (by the size of her target) simply step on her. (In combat she may act childish but she will kill, I didn’t mention this since I toned her down to keep in the family friendly range)

ALSO the one thing that surprised me is the ending! Actually very close to what she does, you know... except for the seriousness...

I’d like to know what she is going to do to her.

Reply lizard socks (Guest), May 30th, 2012, 9:23 pm

Good to know. The second one, at least, maybe we can find a way to retroactively explain it?
I admit I'm not good at writing childish language...

Reply Phenoix12, May 31st, 2012, 6:43 pm

She does have a leader... I guess if he gave her an order she would follow it...

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